• Have the quotes been well-integrated, and do they fit the grammar of the sentences they’re in?
• Has the student modified quotes with [square brackets] and ellipsis […] where appropriate?
• Are the quotes the right length, and has the student selected the most relevant language to include as opposed to inserting a whole chunk of the piece in their own work?
• Do the quotes support the analysis being conducted?
• Does the piece use a sufficiently varied amount of evidence and avoid using the same language multiple times, where possible?
Bettina Arndt’s piece “March Of The Food Fascists”( Herald Sun, May 1st 2006) use alliteration in the title to grab the readers attention instead of pictures. The term “food fascists” is used by Arndt to discredit the Victorian Governments proposal to ban junk food in school canteens by calling them “fascists” The term fascists holds negative connotations as being old fashion and domineering. Arndt begins her article by giving the reader a personal anecdote of watching in horror as lines of children took one look at the healthy lunches offered and walked away. This little story is used to give her argument that banning junk food is ineffective and too extreme a sense of reality. Arndt goes on to say that “most parents have been content with the mix of foods on sale in the tuck shop.” This generalisation gives the impression that the other parents agree that there is nothing wrong with rewarding there children for their days at “academically demanding school”.